What do you think of a modern retelling of a fairy tale?

As much as I hate to, I kind of have to agree with the first two. It's been done quite a bit. But if you really, really work to make it original and your own, then I think it could p. As for this excerpt, it's really good--I only found a few errors, and those are mistakes people make all the time so it's okay. Anyway, good luck with the story!